A short Japanese style poem, similar to haiku in structure: three lines with 17 or fewer total “syllables”, however, senryû tend to be about human foibles while haiku tend to be about nature, and senryû are often cynical or darkly humorous and satiric while haiku are serious.
WALT’S SENRYÛ:
In darkness of night
soft seductive shadows fall,
upon window shade
Copyright (C) Walter J Wojtanik, 2014
rice wine invades
all sense of balance gone
saki to me
Copyright (C) Walter J Wojtanik, 2014
artist painting
scenes of nature
saved for future’s gaze
Copyright (C) Walter J Wojtanik, 2014
POETIC BLOOMINGS 
Responses
All three are good, but the rice wine fulfils the cynical suggestion!
Agreed, Viv.
Without evolution
ancient myth of creation
defies belief.
*
Behind a bouquet
identity is hidden
by untrue lover
*
Discernment needed
to recognise truth in love
from dross of deceit
I think these are excellent.
sad commentary and well written
Wonderful, Viv. Really love that second one!
I’m longsighted and shortsighted;
My perspective seeks
The middle
Now I need a prescription for the middle as well. Trifocals, here I come!
Been there, done that, wearing them!
“Saki to me.” This way madness lies. Wonderful and entertaining examples, Walt.
When muses whisper,
they proffer poetic forms
for their amusement.
copyright 2014, William Preston
Poetic form – a crutch
when poetic muse on strike.
It spurs us on.
Ah, yes; quite so.
They offer me an image, a phrase–but rarely poetry. How lovely.
Or maybe I’m just hard of hearing to their whispers.
I meant this for William’s poem above. Forms do give me a crutch, to hope I am writing poetry and not disjointed lines of prose
Well, anything to entertain our muses!
Hallowe’en justice:
paperhanger’s tree festooned
with toilet paper.
copyright 2014, William Preston
hehehe
With intensity
a dentist on vacation
drills down to bedrock.
copyright 2014, William Preston
Dentists on vacation
think teeth don’t need help –
eat lots of sweets.
(My OH is a retired dentist)
Enjoyed this, I did.
Just in time for Halloween. Even though I just heard a TV spot that today’s children would prefer money to candy bars!
oh dear. William, you’re a master of short forms
The Haunted Bus Stop
The bus is coming!
I must hurry to the stop
Oh no! It is full!
Here comes another bus
I manage to squeeze inside
where is it going?
This bus is speeding
when will it come to a stop?
This is the wrong bus.
quick! I must get off
I shove my way to the door
We are not slowing down
When will this bus stop?
Does it have a destination?
I want to go home!
Wonderful!
poor rider
Great job on this form, Marian. Perfect tale.
GROWTH PROVERB
Human foibles
springs forth bitter leaves,
asperity of trees dwells in roots
Benjamin Thomas
I like this one…wisdom herein.
Agreed.
so much truth. bitterness doesn’t bring healthy fruit
falling in love is
oftentimes more like plunging
down the rabbit hole.
*****
great ball of fire
golden slumbers burned to bits
blinded by the light
*****
your heart is hollow
love scooped out leaves empty shell
just like a pumpkin
*****
After Tuesday’s vote,
Congress justifies its pay.
If not, act surprised.
© Susan Schoeffield
I love these, especially the third.
I too love the third. The image will stay with me
These are right on the money, Susan. I love the last two.
CROSSROADS
Take time to shine,
sing, waltz in the light,
or succumb to beasts of darkness
Benjamin Thomas
Amen to those thoughts.
when I’m depressed, I sing. It helps change my mood. . .
You have no idea how timely this is for me. Love it!
Glad to hear it! 😊
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BLACK MAGIC
They accuse that man
Of having the Evil Eye.
I say he has two.
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THIN-SKINNED
She pokes the thin-skinned
Who are bursting with hot air.
It’s quite deflating.
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ACCIDENT
the banana peel
that causes the man to fall
makes the monkey laugh
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Excellent!
Indeed so.
The twist of these lines are delightful!
Very clever, Sal!
Gossip boomerangs
Lies broaden, multiplying
Returned to sender
So TRUE, love the boomerang effect.
Yes.
Thank you muchly!
Love that ending, Darlene.
A poem hides
Till the poet threatens
To take his toys and go home.
Hah! I sometimes think it’s the other way around.
oh, boy, yes
retail therapy
can be quite expensive but
totally worth it
Lol! U go girl!
Hmmmm… sounds a bit like a plea to me. I love that opening phrase.
writing in cursive
does not mean elegantly
penned profanity
Nice RJ…both of these!
I think I forgot how to write in cursive!
Cursive: embroiled again.
Perfect alternate meaning.
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A Simple Senryû
Pure beauty surrounds
it’s rich beyond expressing
still she’ll spill these words.
Copyright © Hannah Gosselin 2014
There’s beauty in the words
Thank you, Benjamin.
Just a thought-out-loud…Sometimes…they/words can feel so lack-luster and the awe of moments can be so difficult to capture in a way that does it justice. Sigh…
Amen to that.
Question
How does adding weight
on bulky shoulders, help
lighten surplus load?
Love it! So wise.
Halloween outshines
The day for which it prepares
All souls forgotten
Maybe all the Hallows are down in the hollow.
Ha!
PROVERB FOR VICTORY
Conquer the chaos,
wrench it’s wretched neck,
then usher in rays of dawn.
Benjamin Thomas
I love this, especially that second line.
They Are Coming
They come in costume
Seeking candy and comfort
As they did in life
The little twist at the end brings me up short. Well put.
😊
Love your title. This reminds me of an old sci-fi movie. They’re coming, and they’re hungry!
Thanks, Benjamin. I was thinking in B-movie mode.
EVERGREEN DREAM
Wish me life evergreen,
of treasured essence,
until hues fades the scene.
Benjamin Thomas
Lovely.
Great imagery
Thx
Or, until yews fade the scene. (Just being silly.)
😄
BE A LILY
Be a lily,
resting in the valley,
dressed in all simplicity.
Benjamin Thomas
PROVERB OF LOVE
Her love;
finally flew the coop,
the eggs are laid, now the nest is built.
Benjamin Thomas
Past
Starkly
Imprinted
Bright memories
Gone
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tired of problem people
they moved to a new place
…there they are again
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