BEAUTIFUL BLOOMS – PROMPT #104

Tempus Fugit! Time flees. And in the passing of time we find our wisdom. The choices we made have molded our lives, mostly in rewarding ways. The contrast between then and now are most striking. We learn from our accomplishments and our mistakes. Your poems all have painted vivid portraits. We are honored by your talent. Now, for our BLOOMS:

WALT’S BLOOM:

This poem hit close to home, having survived a similar fate. Jerry Walraven (Chev Shire) has express the angst and sadness so perfectly. Thank you friend for letting me know I wasn’t alone.

“The Road” by Jerry Walraven

The direction
was always away,
on that re-gifted Schwinn.
Though the roads
never went far enough
to escape
the smell of stale beer
and cigarettes
and the voice
that told me–
in some hearts
alcohol takes first place
(just ride the bike,
he’s not coming
home from the bar)
the wind would sing
and tell me tales of a time
the road would open up
and take me home.

Light years have passed
and the roads still call
and on a long ride
I can tell that boy
the lessons learned
from skinny tires on pavement
were learned
well.
He knows where his heart is
and these roads
never leave home.

From Marie Elena:

This was a particularly heart-tugging prompt, Walt.  I enjoyed every response.  Most triggered memories of my own, while giving me a little glimpse of the penning poet’s life and heart.  Thanks to all of you for sharing so freely.

After choosing my Bloom,  and emotionally spilling the reasons for my choice, I came to the garden to discover Walt and I were in step.  Though this is not a particularly unusual occurrence,  one of us will normally post another choice.  There are, after all, so many beautiful blooms from which to choose, and he and I both struggle in selecting just one. There has been only one other poet who has received both Walt’s and my Bloom selection for a given prompt:  Michele Brenton (“Banana the Poet”) for her Viking Funeral.

Chev, your offering this week brought tears to my eyes with each reading.  You are a master at use of title, phrasing, reflection, and flow.  “The Road” aptly refers to both the physical road, and the experiences and lessons that have brought the writer to where he is today. “The direction was always away,” “that re-gifted Schwinn,” “the roads never went far enough to escape” – Wow.  Could there possibly be more illustration and sentiment packed into so few words?

Though I wrote more on the lure of this brilliant piece, nothing I can say does your own words any justice.  And so I will simply enthusiastically second Walt’s selection, and offer you my own Bloom.

Thank you for gracing our site with your gift.

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Responses

  1. SevenAcreSky Avatar
    SevenAcreSky

    Jerry,
    what a brave and honest baring of your soul…your courageous words were well deserving of both our mentors’ choice. Your ability to relate deep emotion, to cast that outward to the life around you so we can see it too, is amazing to me. I must confess I honor that skill with envy. Thanks for sharing.

  2. Salvatore Buttaci Avatar
    Salvatore Buttaci

    What an absolutely powerful poem this is, Jerry. Those of us who rode the “bike” with you back then know what it means to have our heartstrings tugged, and those of us who were blessed not to know wish they had the power to change the past of those unhappy children.

  3. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
    Hannah Gosselin

    I’ve ALWAYS been such a fan of Chev’s work!!! Congratulations…such a beautiful bloom!!

  4. Jerry Walraven Avatar
    Jerry Walraven

    Walt and Marie,
    Thank you both for this honor but, more than that, the heart you pour into this site.
    I have to confess that I didn’t contribute during the memoir project because these pieces are much more challenging than my normal (‘oh look, the sky is blue’) pieces. What’s funny is that I normally feel better after writing one and finally not pretending that everything was OK back then.This one still doesn’t flow as I would like it too but, perhaps, the choppiness serves a purpose. Life is, after all, rarely smooth.
    Thank you again my friends.

  5. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
    Henrietta Choplin

    Congratulations, Jerry… !!!

  6. sheryl kay oder Avatar
    sheryl kay oder

    Well done, Jerry.

  7. David Avatar
    David

    Great choice – Powerful poem Chev – Congratulations!

  8. Janet Avatar
    Janet

    I agree. A great choice for a poem that requires an immediate re-read! STUNNING!

  9. k8e314 Avatar
    k8e314

    Wonderful choice, both of you. Congratulations, Jerry!

  10. flashpoetguy Avatar
    flashpoetguy

    WHEN THE TIME IS RIGHT

    when the egg is broken
    determines what you will find
    breakfast yolk or gold chick

    all of life is in the timing
    those distractedly deaf
    to the opportune knock

    cannot go back in time
    and kindly request
    a second hearing

    in that moment
    when you can show kindness
    do so without hesitation

    #

  11. flashpoetguy Avatar
    flashpoetguy

    Ignore above poem which I posted on the wrong page! See new prompt.

  12. seingraham Avatar
    seingraham

    What a wonderful poem for this week’s bloom! I’m only sorry I didn’t get around to writing to this worthwhile prompt… I do want to thank you both for manning this agricultural magical place though…it is a sanctuary for so many of us…

  13. Sara v Avatar
    Sara v

    Marie and Walt, I can understand how you both could have come to this conclusion. I have been a long time fan of Chev and Jerry (not knowing they were one and the same….) His poetry always is full of emotion and beautiful words. I love that “skinny tires on pavement”. Bike-riding was a great escape.

  14. Sara v Avatar
    Sara v

    Whoops! Forgot to say congratulations 🙂