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BEAUTIFUL BLOOMS – PROMPT #136 AND IN-FORM FREE-FOR-ALL

WALT’S BEAUTIFUL BLOOM SELECTION:
We’ve dealt with “Noise” this week. And I was drawn to two poems in this regard. One is rambunctious and very expressive in a loud sort of way. The other dismisses noise as an intrusion and the silence becomes deafening in this sense. And so, I offer two BLOOMS for the prompt. I give a BLOOM to RJ Clarken for “Noise” and one to Vivienne Blake for “Noises Off”

Noise 
by RJ Clarken

Fwwwap fwwwap fwwwap went my lips
as I sp-sp-spit out some pips

and then gave some thought to Onomatopoeia.

I can grrrrowwwl
or meooooowwww
but just how
does a cow
make a mmmooooo
while she’d chew
on her cud?
This is ud-
derly, sud-
denly noise.
Poem ploys
are just scripts
to eclipse

the more serious kinds of POW! erful stuff that just whifffffffs

(pen or lips.)
Damn those pips!

Scritch scratch scratch
rhyme and kvetch
‘til a wretch-
ed verse is penned……
Here’s my zzzzt frnerk wibblesnok quiridingdingding poem, my friend.

NOISES OFF
by Vivienne Blake

Whoosh and crash outside
as wind and jet-stream coincide.
A clatter from the kitchen
as someone does the dishes.
Wailing violins from the radio –
I could do without the audio
accompaniment.
Silence in the ocean
in the world of fishes.
I think I’ll go there.

WILLIAM PRESTON’S BEAUTIFUL BLOOM – PROMPT #136:

This poem is, for me, a superb bit of storytelling, even though it deals with a short incident. I was present with the narrator, breathing too, hee hee hoo, hee hee hoo, even though, as a male, I have no idea and can’t imagine what the experience is like. Yet, though Nancy’s skillful handling of sounds and picture-writing (pillows, blankets and goody bag), I was there. More than anything else, however, what struck me about this poem was how the young couple and the older (I presume) narrator were joined in sharing a common experience, as told in the last stanza. I thought this was wonderful work. Hence my proffered bloom.

LAMAZE INSTRUCTOR’S PHONE RINGS 
by Nancy Posey

They’d call in the middle of the night—
I said they could—to ask if they should go.
Pains were coming on schedule,
feeling like I’d said they would,
radiating from the back to front.

They knew. I knew they knew.
They called for reassurance,
unnecessary permission,
a layman’s advice before they risked
calling the doctor after hours
or driving to the hospital, pillows,
blankets and goody bag in tow,
fearful it was just a false alarm. 

Somehow I could tell, when
in the middle of a sentence,
she’d stop. I could hear it
in the silence over the phone.

Get your focal point, I’d tell her,
take a cleaning breath, then breathe:
slowly, in through your nose
and out through your mouth.

I’d hear her shift to the hee hee hoo
hee hee hoo, a panting to handle
more than the early twinges
of a body ready to unload its cargo
after nine months. Go, I’d say.
Call if you need me. You’ll be fine.

Before falling back to sleep again,
I’d find myself breathing hee hee hoo,
hee hee hoo before slowing returning
to breathing–in through my nose–
and out through my mouth. 

IN-FORM BEAUTIFUL BLOOM

As expected, forms that were used exemplify the poets that chose them. It was easy to see where their expression takes root. One poem came center stage a bit more than the rest. The thoughts expressed came cascading in imagery. It was only fitting that the form used was the Cascade. Barbara Young this BLOOM is for you!

A CASCADE
by Barbara Young
Where would I stand
If the world passed in parade today?
On the basket-woven ancient cobble,
Or the flat plates of beehive pave?

If this were the end,
If I were obliged to fit my actions
To my words and judge my fellow man,
Where would I stand?

It’s so damn easy to condemn
The floats of war, the martial brass bands.
Could I sweep all uniforms off the streets
If the world passed in parade today?

Should I slaughter the poachers
And return the elephants to their homes,
Uncage the giant cats to find their prey
On the basket-woven ancient cobble?

Who comes behind
To judge my judgments? And who follows him?
Who would dare be on the reviewing stand
Or the flat plates of beehive pave?

 

CONGRATULATIONS to RJ Clarken, Vivienne Blake, Nancy Posey and Barbara Young on your selections for the BEAUTIFUL BLOOM.

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13 thoughts on “BEAUTIFUL BLOOMS – PROMPT #136 AND IN-FORM FREE-FOR-ALL

  1. Thank you for my Bloom, Walt, it cheered me up as I’ve written little lately and nothing that’s pleased me. And you have included me in such wonderful company – the Bloom poems this week are fabulous, specially RJ’s – I was there, so vivid is her writing.

  2. RJ Clarken on said:

    Walt – not only did you accord me a truly unexpected, but wonderful honor – but you paired me with one of my very favorite poets! What a happy surprise (noisy cheers!)

    Thanks – and congrats to the other Bloomers! 😀

  3. Excellent choices for winning poems! Congratulations to all the winners.

  4. Congratulations RJ, Vivienne, Nancy and Barbara! Such wonderful selections!!!

  5. Marie Elena on said:

    Oh my goodness, what fabulous choices. These four poems are all so different from one another, showing off the variety found in this wonderful garden. Wow.

  6. Wonderful picking hosts and excellent work poets!! Congratulations, RJ, Viv, Nancy and Barbara…beautiful blooms indeed!!

    Warm smiles to all in the garden today. 🙂

  7. Wonderful, colourful and exquisitely fun!

  8. elishevasmom on said:

    Congats to all of you ladies! Especially Barbara! I love being able to say “I told you so”, that you mastered the cascade form quite nicely 😀

  9. elishevasmom on said:

    btw, I appreciate the suggestions on the copyright symbol. I guess it is lost to me via Open Office. Have no fear…I have not yet given up 🙂

  10. Congratulations, ladies! I really enjoyed reading all of your poems. Very vivid imagery. 🙂

  11. Been out of town so apologize for being late with my congratulations RJ, Vivienne, Nancy and Barbara! Great work!

  12. RJ, Viv, nancy, and Barbara: Congratulations on wonderful poems.

  13. What an incredible collection of poetry! Congratulations RJ, Viv, Nancy, and Barbara, thoroughly enjoyed them all 🙂

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