PROMPT #129 – PERSONIFICATION

Humans seem to love attaching human qualities to other animals and inanimate objects. Ships are usually referred to as feminine; and objects such as automobiles, firearms, and sewing machines have been named. Dogs, cats, horses, pigs, and other animals have been said to “know” or “feel,” in ways understood to be human. Write a poem about an object or animal that has been personified in some way.

MARIE ELENA’S LIMERICK

She’s a Great Grandfather

Perplexed by the words he is choosing –
His mixing of gender’s amusing.
He says, “She’s a beauty,”
While doing the duty
Of winding our clock.  It’s confusing!

© copyright 2013,  Marie Elena Good

WILLIAM’S ATTEMPT

U.S.S. YORKTOWN, OFF MIDWAY, 4 JUNE 1942

She was hurt before she started.
Injured in battle at the Coral Sea,
she had to be patched and jury-rigged
and sent into battle again
toward another objective.
She met her mates upon the sea
at a spot on the open ocean
called, perhaps prayerfully, Point Luck.
There, she awaited the Emperor’s fleet
steaming toward its objective.
She met her enemy and they were hers.
In rapid succession and shot with luck,
she and her mates flung funeral pyres
on three of four Japanese carriers
deflected from their objective,
but the remaining carrier, determined
to fight on for the Son of Heaven;
sent planes aloft to scan the sea.
They found her, and she knew
that she was their objective.
She was injured again. And again:
bombs and torpedoes from planes
and a spread of torpedoes from a submarine
raised fires and spawned explosions;
they had met their objective.
She burned; she listed, she slipped beneath the sea;
with tears accompanying her,
she sought the bottom, to join her victims.
She was gone, leaving her mates
midway to their objective.

© copyright 2013, William Preston

WALT COMES ALIVE

WHAT’S IN A NAME?

Roses smell sweet, and their beauty
is their sworn duty to nature.
In any nomenclature, their stature blooms
filling every room with their fragrant fare.

Shall I call a woman a rose?
By any other name she would be as sweet
and beautiful, a dutiful inspiration
in any nomenclature. A flower amongst thorns.

Well worn on a well-worn sleeve,
she leaves an impression, that says her heart,
the blush of a rose, has chosen you to be her gardener.
And you are blessed to hold her bloom.

Her perfume, like the rose, flows to your nostrils,
filling you with her heavenly scent,
for she was heaven sent. She was meant to be nurtured
and cared for, and what’s more, to be admired

and loved. Above all else, she will grace your life
brightening your days as long as she stays in view.
Just like roses too, a women is most beautiful.
A woman is a rose. What’s in a name?

© copyright 2013, Walter J Wojtanik

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  1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
    Erin Kay Hope

    The Wind In The Tree

    He gently flings her vibrant coat away,
    His quick, cold fingers travel down her skin,
    Caressing, throwing into disarray
    Her every sense, her head begins to spin;

    She shudders slightly at his gentle touch,
    Her long arms trembling with every stroke,
    And falling still as he begins to clutch
    Her closer, all her passion to evoke;

    His whispers constantly into her ear,
    Her Autumn colors rustle as they move,
    Not one small part of her is touched with fear:
    Naught in this world, she says, can stop this love;

    But he was gone ere the first snowfall came,
    She stands there, bare…was it all just a game?

    © Copyright Erin Kay Hope – 2013

    1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
      Andra Negroiu

      I love this doomed love story, Erin – you elegantly breathed life into the wind by writing these enchanting verses.

      1. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
        Henrietta Choplin

        Yes… so Lovely…

        1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
          Erin Kay Hope

          Thank you, Andra and Henrietta! 🙂

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Sensual and emotive. So much so that it makes me believe the tree truly feels this way.

      Erin Kay: When you began writing poetry, it was obvious you had an impressive natural talent. In the months you have been posting here, I’ve watched you blossom into one of the most amazing poetic voices I’ve encountered.

      Keep wowing us, kiddo.

      1. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
        Hannah Gosselin

        I agree with Marie.

        It’s such a joy to see your work blossoming in this garden, Erin!

        1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
          Erin Kay Hope

          Thank you, Hannah! You and Marie both…wow…you’re bringing tears….

          1. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
            Hannah Gosselin

            Tears of joy are the best kind!! ♥ you!

            1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
              Erin Kay Hope

              ❤!!

      2. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
        Erin Kay Hope

        Oh my gosh…thank you so much, Marie! I can’t begin to say how thankful I am for your words – you are too sweet. How blessed I am. Love you! ❤

        1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
          Poetic Bloomings

          Love you back, hon.

    3. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Wow. Lovely and sensual.

      1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
        Erin Kay Hope

        Thank you, Will!

    4. elishevasmom Avatar
      elishevasmom

      Erin, This left me breathless.

      1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
        Erin Kay Hope

        What a compliment! Thank you, Ellen. 🙂

    5. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
      georgeplace2013DebiSwim

      We both had wind on the mind. Your poem is lovely, stirring… steamy even:)

      1. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
        georgeplace2013DebiSwim

        William – a wow, Marie so cute and Walt, Viv is right, so romantic.

      2. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
        Erin Kay Hope

        Thanks, Debi! The tree was actually who I was trying to bring to life, though. I always feel so sorry for them when their leaves are all gone…

    6. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Very beautiful Erin and well written.

      1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
        Erin Kay Hope

        Thanks, Ben! 🙂

    7. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Perfectly captured, Erin!!!

      1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
        Erin Kay Hope

        Thank you!! ❤

    8. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Erin…I can only amen the comments above. What a perfect personification. Your vision of this seducing enchantment by Wind and Tree’s innocent blush and sudden heartbreak was beautiful.

      1. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
        Erin Kay Hope

        You are too kind…thank you!

    9. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Erin, this is a storybook poem, and so lovely.

  2. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com Avatar
    http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com

    Erin, I love that you chose to personify the wind, and they way you brought the words tolife.
    William, your history poem was emotional and so well written.. ME your limerick made me laugh, and Walt, you are ab old romantic.

    1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      😀

    2. elishevasmom Avatar
      elishevasmom

      All hit right on the head!!

    3. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
      Erin Kay Hope

      Thank you, Viv. And you are so right about the other three! Marie, that’s too cute. 🙂

    4. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      My thoughts exactly on these three excellent works.

  3. Andra Negroiu Avatar
    Andra Negroiu

    Voyeur

    Silent companion,
    what am I to you that you should
    bear my ghosts upon your lap?

    Cloistered stranger, can my heart
    become
    enlivened by your hunger,
    my hands
    emboldened
    by your gaze
    drilling its way beyond my shoulder,
    shaping
    the loving way you grasp
    and hide
    what names and tattered tales you find
    cavorting on your velveteen facade?

    You creak your loneliness
    beneath the twitches
    of holographic butterflies
    until it sounds like friendship,
    as I drape my ghosts
    along your wooden arms
    and light them paper candles.

    The smell of fresh rain
    clings to the azaleas and the pavement
    is strewn with silver footprints.
    The moonlight
    chases ’round its tail on folding wings.

    Upon your cushioned lap,
    I sit and write.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Thoroughly enchanting.

      1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Thank you, William! 🙂

    2. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      Andra – I love…. no, LOVE your voice. I could “listen” to your words forever and still be left asking for more. An extension to eternity, perhaps.

      1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        ABSOLUTELY. Gorgeous, gorgeous poetic voice!

      2. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Meena, this is one of the most beautiful compliments I have ever received – really! Marie, you are truly too kind in saying that. Thank you both!

    3. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
      georgeplace2013DebiSwim

      It is all beautiful but I esp., love this:
      The smell of fresh rain
      clings to the azaleas and the pavement
      is strewn with silver footprints.
      The moonlight
      chases ’round its tail on folding wings.

      1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Thank you, Debi! That’s actually my favorite stanza as well. I wrote it first, then built the rest of the poem around it.

    4. jlynn sheridan Avatar
      jlynn sheridan

      Opening with a question hooked me. A muse perhaps?

      1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Nope, just your friendly neighborhood armchair – but it does inspire me in its own quiet way :))

    5. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      *sigh* This makes my brain feel happy….warm-fuzzy-happy.

      1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Thank you, Hannah! I’m happy to see you liked it! 🙂

    6. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Andra, this was lovely. The softness of the moment, the considering pleas, were stilling, like the pause behind a question.

      1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Thank you, Damon! I also love the way you phrased your comment, like a poem in itself (“stillling, like the pause behind a question”) 🙂

    7. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      That first stanza is stunning, and pulled me right in to a charming poem.

      1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Thank you, Sara! I’m glad you enjoyed reading it! 🙂

    8. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Wow. Got lost in this one

      1. Andra Negroiu Avatar
        Andra Negroiu

        Thank you! I’m glad it had the intended effect [smiles like the Cheshire cat] :))

  4. RJ Clarken Avatar
    RJ Clarken

    I used this one for Poetic Asides’ ‘Elements’ because it’s totally anthropomorphic anyway…

    Those Periodic Neighborhood Block Parties…

    “I’m
    in my
    element,”
    cried Helium, in a high, squeaky voice.
    “Mercury’s rising to the occasion,
    too,” noted
    Gold and
    Zinc.

    “Um,
    Bari…
    um…would you
    care to dance?” asked Lead. She nodded. “Lead on!”
    Cobalt queried, “Have you seen the Bismuths?”
    “They Argon,”
    replied
    Tin.

    “Uh
    oh!” yelled
    Chromium,
    “It’s the Coppers! This party’s outta hand!”
    DJ Dubnium (doing Dubstep) just
    ignored him,
    which was
    cool

    but
    Iron
    disagreed.
    “Don’t be such an Arsenic,” Sulfur hissed.
    Then, the Cops joined in, which was Tantalum
    to giving
    the O
    K

    for
    the fete
    to go on.
    “You and Iodine well tonight,” Krypton
    told Silver. “Our Table’s full of Nitro-
    gen-erous
    portions
    here.”

    And
    so, the
    party went
    on, with much Praseodymium from one
    and all, who toasted, “Livermorium
    and prosper!”
    That is
    all.

    ###

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I commented on the Asides blog, but I didn’t mention that I was thinking of the prompt here when I read it there. This is stunning, funning, punning work. Thoroughly enjoyable.

    2. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
      Henrietta Choplin

      OM G… the talent/brilliance!!

    3. elishevasmom Avatar
      elishevasmom

      This has left me beside myself. Wow! and Wow!

    4. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
      georgeplace2013DebiSwim

      Maybe I’m a boron but I zinc this is so cool!

    5. jlynn sheridan Avatar
      jlynn sheridan

      LOL!!! “Don’t be such an Arsenic,” Sulfur hissed. I’m so going to start using that line!!!

    6. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      OH.
      MY.
      WORD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Could you BE any more amazing?!

      1. William Preston Avatar
        William Preston

        It’s elementary: yes.

    7. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      This is very Creative RJ

    8. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      I must chime in…RJ this is BRILLIANT! Wow.

    9. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      RJ, from the first line on you had me back in high school with my chemistry teacher! I can see the huge chart on the wall at my left, which at the time I had memorized (yes I was a pre-personal-technology-era geek in the late sixties). This was absolutely fun. Although if I had been at that party I would have been a wall-flourine.

    10. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      I am knocked out by this amazingly clever poem.

  5. flashpoetguys Avatar
    flashpoetguys

    PEN PAL

    I never did learn how one goes about
    Mourning the death of a pen that runs out.
    Somewhere within a long-winded word
    My writing mate inked to scrawls absurd.
    It coughed up blue phlegm, scratching for breath,
    Fought the good fight, then gave in to death.

    I clicked it, I coaxed it, but much too late.
    Wordlessly, I sat with a dead writing mate.
    Whom do you call at a time such as this?
    Who would have thought a pen could be missed.
    So I sat there and wept, sentimental old fool,
    And I cursed the sadness of endings so cruel.

    In token of thanks for services done,
    I refrained from writing poems that are fun.
    All that I’d write? Elegies to pens:
    Sorely neglected, unsung heroes and friends.
    Now grief is behind me; I’m writing again
    Poems that are happy, but in pencil, not pen.

    I look at past writings in a time that’s gone by,
    And recapture fond memories of an old friend that ran dry.

    #

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I love this. I had a Waterman once….

      1. flashpoetguy Avatar
        flashpoetguy

        I still have my green Waterman fountain pen, but I don’t use it. The same for my black and silver Papermate ballpoint pen. Now don’t laugh or call the boys in white, okay? I placed each of those two pens in a pen gift box on top of a layer of cotton, then taped the boxes shut. I know. It sounds like two coffins nailed down, but I loved those pens and always feared losing them. I may ask that they keep me company when they drop my sorry self on a bed of cotton!

        1. WmPreston Avatar
          WmPreston

          I understand. I still have a Waterman, albeit it uses cartridges, and a Mt. Blanc that fills the old-fashioned way.

    2. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
      Henrietta Choplin

      Ohh… true friendship!!

    3. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      I love this reminder: “Elegies to pens://Sorely neglected, unsung heroes and friends.”

      I am so zealously protective of my writing friends. We had to use fountain pens in school – the cartridge kind. I absolutely cherished my Mt Blanc (gift when I turned 16) and Waterman (gift when I graduated from college). Despite my best care, there were lost in the any of a number of cross country moves.

    4. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
      georgeplace2013DebiSwim

      Very sweet. I guess we all have had favorite pens but only Sal would think to write a elegy to his pen.

    5. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Oh, Sal … this is just ADORABLE!

    6. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Splendid, great ode to the pen Sal!

    7. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Fantastic!!! This is such fun, Sal!!

    8. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Sal, what a delight!

    9. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      I had a Mont Blanc once, in lovely swirling colors, but it was not immortal. Now I use extra-tip pens from an art supply store.

  6. David Avatar
    David

    This is an old one – not sure if I have shared it here before or not…

    Trees
    By David De Jong
    April 2012

    Been workin’ out in the grove most of the day,
    Things runnin’ through my mind, no particular way.
    I was pickin’ up wood, debris, dead trees an’ such,
    When it dawns on me; folks is like these trees purty much.
    There be tall ones and short ones, to say the least,
    There be gnarly ones, lookin’ fierce as a beast.
    Some appear as grand, with height stretchin’ so high to heaven overhead,
    But on closer look, they’re just standin’, not livin’ at all, totally dead.
    You’ll see big round ones, that seem to get more than their share,
    Shadin’ out the scrawny, so thin to see em, you have to stare.
    Some carry roots deep, holdin’ strong, able to weather the storm,
    Others so weak and shallow, a light breeze gives em new form.
    The steadfast look confident, even showin’ their age,
    The saplings bend and fall easy, like turnin’ a page.
    Tall pine half-full of life, green on one side, brown an’ dead on the other,
    Clingin’, strugglin’ to survive, facin’ storms and all life’s weather.
    Some is bloomin’ with flowers an’ the scent of sweet perfume,
    Others are dry an’ flakey, when you touch em, they poof in a plume.
    The broken are held up by a neighbor, leanin’ a might, but not lettin’ em fall.
    The lonely just lie on the ground, wastin’ away, untouched, unnoticed by all.
    Then there are the needy ones, wrapped up in themselves, stranglin’ what life they got,
    Sadly, they push an’ shove everyone else away, hoardin’ it all, not sharin’ a spot.
    Even the plum bushes; attractive with blossoms, an’ leaves velvety thick,
    Deceiving everyone of their thorns; long, deadly, an’ ready to stick.
    Little peculiar how these similarities to people stand out in the trees,
    Only; we as humans can repent, ask God’s forgiveness down on our knees.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I l ve this. We have a conifer like your dead-on-one-side pine, only ours is a spruce.

    2. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
      Henrietta Choplin

      I see it… Love this!!

    3. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
      georgeplace2013DebiSwim

      Wonderful insight.

    4. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      This is just great David!

    5. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      SO true!! I’m glad you brought this one out into the light of the garden, David!

    6. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      David. Excellent, so thorough an analysis of the vast human forest.

    7. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Love this, David!

  7. William Preston Avatar
    William Preston

    THE FEEDER SOUNDS OFF

    Romantics harp about the life
    that courses all around me;
    they think my world’s devoid of strife
    but, listen, they astound me.

    Imagine if your plate was full
    of suet, shells, and droppings.
    I think you’d say it all is bull
    to have a lap of sloppings.

    copyright 2013, William Preston

    1. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
      Henrietta Choplin

      :D!!

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Oh no! LOL!

    3. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Bill, i will have a greater sympathy for these humble feeders now forever. FUN!

    4. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Cool and unique, William.

  8. William Preston Avatar
    William Preston

    Marie and Walt, it feels good to see both of your poems up top, where they belong. Marie, your limerick title caused a double take, which is probably how you intended it. I enjoyed reading it. Walt, your poem feels sensual and nostalgic at the same time, to me anyway. I love the deep affection is exudes. Thanks for posting.

    1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      😀

  9. connielpeters Avatar
    connielpeters

    Au

    Like a carrot dangling
    before a donkey’s nose
    I led men unaware
    the value lay
    in the mountains,
    the forest,
    the sea
    themselves.

    1. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      Really love this one – esp, the title.

      1. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
        georgeplace2013DebiSwim

        Yes!

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Beautiful and brilliant – in more ways than one.

    3. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Connie, just started watching the West documentary by Ken Burns on Netflix and the gold rush was a phenomena just as you say here…a discovery of greater wealth than Au.

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  11. Meena Rose Avatar
    Meena Rose

    A Blanket Sacrifice
    By: Meena Rose

    Verses continue to tumble;
    The ink steadily bleeds;
    A punctured vein spewing
    Royal blue – at times
    Trapped within the salted
    Pools of a language so intense;
    An incoherent amalgam of Life.

    I try my best to absorb it all –
    The royal blue and the regal salt;
    I try in vain to divert the blue
    So it can hold a semblance of its
    Form and I never know when I will
    Have angered her and failed her;
    She, full of loathing, rips my

    Children out of my being;
    With each attack, pain
    Lances through my spine;
    Again, I am left dazed;
    No, confused, for our purpose
    Is but to serve and buffet
    The world from the incessant

    Pull of the pit of human anguish;
    Who is there to hear my plea and
    To recognize my own anguish?
    Must our service be without
    Recognition? Inanimate objects,
    You say – a travesty of thought
    Aimed at keeping your life simple.

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      The intensity of this poem is startling and gripping; there is nothing inanimate about it or its object.

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        Thanks, Bill.

      2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        Wow. Spot on … and so GORGEOUS penned.

        1. Meena Rose Avatar
          Meena Rose

          Thanks, Marie. Of course, after writing that, I just had to go and apologize to my journal.

    2. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Royalty, I enjoyed your first stanza especially. Let the verses tumble!

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        Thanks, Ben.

    3. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      A rich eruption of verbiage here, Meena! Lovely writing!

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        Thank you, Hannah.

    4. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Agreed…rhe emotion flows. Intense Meena.

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        Thank you so much 🙂

    5. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Gripping first stanza, leading into a beautifully written Poem.

  12. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
    Henrietta Choplin

    Envelope

    He
    enfolds
    me through the
    sad, keeping me
    warm.

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      What a marvelous word-picture.

    2. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Said very well Hen!

    3. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Nice!

    4. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      You’re one of the queens of poignant brevity, Hen! Truly. 🙂

    5. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Henrietta, this was lovely imagery.

    6. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
      Henrietta Choplin

      Thank you all so much… I Loved writing it!!

  13. Marjory MT Avatar
    Marjory MT

    A Living Paint-brush

    Giving life to a canvas, with each strock of color telling a story not seen before, a setting for moods, joys remembered, saddness recalled, pleasant days relived, hopes revealed, a sprinkle of love, a dash of tears. Unfolding the stories of people, lives, events drawn from a tube to brush, to canvas, to eye.

    Blue, white ocean waves
    Green, purple for the folage
    Gold and pink sunset,

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      To me, this word-picture feels like a painting.

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Beautiful, Marjory. And it’s true that paintings give life to a canvas.

    3. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      I love the shape this took…that you used your body for discussion and the haiku part as ingredients…a wonderful haibun!

    4. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Marjory, I loved this living brush so deliberate and joyful in his duty and purpose.

    5. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Yes, Thanks for painting this one Marjory

  14. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Old Betsy

    It was my mother’s old Plymouth Horizon
    That was graceful as a elephant in slippers, brown as a cocoa bean and loud as Mack truck. Old Betsy was her name.

    She always…well, most of the time got us to where we needed to be. Whether in bitter-cold hard winters or perfectly warm but uncooperative, mother would say ” come on Betsy, come on Betsy, come on Betsy” as she turned the ignition over and over fully hoping to hear that old engine fired up again. As if somehow she could start the car on sheer willpower.

    Old Betsy was anything but timid, just as bold as my mother, we would hear them coming a mile away. Turning around, she would put it in reverse and back up our long driveway with the skill of a wicked stuntman.

    But our fondest remembrance will always be mothers chant “come on Betsy, come on Betsy, come on Betsy”.

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      Wonderful! I was hooked at “elephant in slippers.”

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Lol, thx William

      2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        Me too! This is just darling, Benjamin! I KNEW someone would have a car story! 😀

    2. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
      georgeplace2013DebiSwim

      I can just hear the “come on, Betsy” sweet story and memory.

    3. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Nice!!! Makes me want to name my car! 🙂

    4. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Benjamin, indeed this was a vivid, and, audible memory of what must have been like a family member.

    5. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      I love this. It almost “hears” like – Old Betsy’s Wake. There is the richness of nostalgia, the inside joke remembered – I equate these vignettes to “The Smores of Life”. Thank you for serving up something so yummy.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Thx
        🙂

      2. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        The garden is not complete without a Rose!

        1. Meena Rose Avatar
          Meena Rose

          It is official, Ben. You have just made this old gal blush like a school girl. 🙂

          1. poetryshack Avatar
            poetryshack

            I just took a gander at your website in the about section. “What is humanity, …to be human?” Deep questions there.

    6. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Love the description here, and it reminded me of an old Ford mustang in peculiar rust color that was called, Deloris.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Lol! Thats a good name

  15. elishevasmom Avatar
    elishevasmom

    This is an excerpt from a eulogy I wrote for a special friend several years ago.

    It Rained Last Wednesday

    It rained last Wednesday.
    A cold, raw unforgiving
    mist, scowling
    brow of drizzle –
    perched on the shoulders of everyone.

    It rained last Wednesday.
    Under cover of bad
    weather, disguised as
    secret agents –
    Pain and Suffering shook hands on
    a job well done –
    and turned my friend over to
    the hands of Peace and Stillness.

    It rained last Wednesday.
    The world has lost a foundation
    pillar.
    The wheel has
    lost its hub.
    The family
    has lost its patriarch.
    Yes, John. We’ll all watch out
    for each other – as you want us to –
    but none of us can take
    your place for any of us –
    nor will we try.
    But you’ll always keep us laughing.

    As rain washes the sky, so
    tears cleanse the soul.
    Even the clouds cry when
    they are over-burdened.
    And it rained last Wednesday.

    Ellen Knight 11.17.13
    write a personification poem for PB

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      Tenderly spot on. The recurring “rain” theme fell like the tears.

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      “Even the clouds cry when
      they are over-burdened.”

      Wow …

    3. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Beautiful Ellen and a heartfelt tribute.

    4. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      “Even the clouds cry when
      they are over-burdened.”

      Love that…

      and I really enjoy the capitalized Pain and Suffering Peace and Stillness…

      This reminds me of a book I love, “Hinds’ Feet on High Places,” by Hannah Hurnard.

    5. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Ellen, this was a solemn sadness personified by that cold drizzle…as well as those partnered undertakers Pain and Suffering. I could see them standing there in their brim-dripping hats and wet glistening black raincoats assured they had conducted the service so well.

    6. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      Ellen – beautifully penned. Dignity, sadness, reality of a world that keeps moving on – the very ooey gooey carmely center of so called life.

    7. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Such a touching tribute, written beautifully, and with grace.

  16. janeshlensky Avatar
    janeshlensky

    He Names the Trees Francis

    A kind of crazy Eden, we
    name every animal and tree,
    large pots and plates, both shoes and skates,
    piano, guitar, and psaltery.

    He favors Francis, I’m confused,
    because, you see, the name was used
    already for the gingko tree.
    How can you use it for a spruce?

    His car is Brenda, mine is Claire;
    one cat is Warren, Moose, and Bear,
    We double up on nicknames, too.
    He’s Fluff and Lamb, and I’m Hey, You!

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      Hey! You did good.

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Hey, You! I’m chuckling big out here, Jane! ADORABLE! (And love your ending!)

    3. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Hi Jane, this is quite lovely. I think you’ve touched upon our world of nicknames
      🙂

    4. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Such a fun poem, Jane. This is inspiring me to name some of our plants here in the house… 🙂

    5. janeshlensky Avatar
      janeshlensky

      Thanks, friends. We’re afflicted with personification at my house 😀

    6. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      I understand fully. Becky just shakes her head when I speak to the squirrels on a first name basis. Loved it Jane.

    7. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      This is so counter to how I grew up. I adored every last bit of it. This incessant Hey You’er will have to mind her language. Hey You’s already taken 🙂

  17. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
    georgeplace2013DebiSwim

    Wild Winds

    Across my cheek, gently, in slow, warm, caress
    you stroke, then all over, every touch a learned finesse.
    I close my eyes and savor this moment too quickly gone
    yet, you stoke such longing in me with your come on.

    Day by hot, heavy day, I look for you. Every glance
    out the window is a query. Do the flowers dance?
    The grasses bend? The tree tops sway? And as you left
    in a huff will you return the same way? Do. Prove

    you love me, me alone with each gesture tender
    you swathe me with yearning, a yellow splendor
    that covers me, beckons me to throw in with you,
    and go, footloose, unfettered. Oh, how you woo

    my stale, sad soul to follow you to exotic places
    turn my back on home, duty and familiar faces.
    This my heart’s secret craving that blows
    fierce … I want to be whooshed away, wild Derecho.

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      This, for me, has echoes of The Wayward Wind, a song from when i was young. It’s a lot more intense than that, though, and powerfully written.

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Excellent!

    3. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Whoa there! Very passionate piece. I love poems about the wind. Your last few lines really packed a punch.

    4. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      This is written with such a beautiful aching longing tone. Captured well, Debi!

    5. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      i must agree with Hannah, the longing gathered and deepened from caress to swathe to craving. LOVELY!

    6. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Wonderful sense of longing.

  18. jlynn sheridan Avatar
    jlynn sheridan

    As some of you know, it’s a wee bit windy here in IL today.
    I hear the sirens as I post this. 85 mph wind gusts in some places.

    “Wind”

    I see the wind Its arms adrift
    our cobalt home A gasping dome

    I hear her spar with tendrilled oaks
    and swollen tides of beastly lakes

    I feel her steely force amass
    A gathered hunger poised to grasp

    ungrounded prey and men afraid
    to battle through her cyclone laugh

    I taste her journeys on my tongue
    The brine of seven seas and sun

    Of spiraled desert heat and thaw
    of terra firma tundra cold

    Her booted kick uprooting years
    with robust howls intent to spin

    the earth around And round again
    battered by the arms of Wind.

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      Wow. This is mesmerizing. Wonderful collation of image and sound.

      1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        Absolutely! A gripping read.

    2. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      This is quite enchanting. Hope all is well in your area with all the tornadoes.
      🙂

    3. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Wow…the cadence here is such a thrilling experience, jlynne! I really love the imagery and words choices…

      “I taste her journeys on my tongue
      The brine of seven seas and sun

      Of spiraled desert heat and thaw
      of terra firma tundra cold”

      Love these!

    4. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Loved this…the cyclic rhythm sets a reverberating tone of awe and fear.

    5. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Love the taste images here.

  19. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
    Poetic Bloomings

    William, “Yorktown” is just an amazing write. You managed to capture what “she” would most likely actually be feeling. Especially your last few lines are just fabulous.

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      Thanks, Marie

  20. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
    Poetic Bloomings

    Walt: Yours is so visual, I have to admit that I at first misunderstood … I thought you were speaking of a woman, and comparing her to a rose. Bravo!

  21. Lorna Cahall Avatar
    Lorna Cahall

    Hagia Sophia
    Arching walls, reaching so high—
    a petition to far off stars,
    proportioned gold mosaic
    to lure Her, ensnare Her fast.
    I am here, for immortality,
    to listen to endless prayers

    All sad slaves, quarry and mines,
    all who are dead, like torn prayer flags
    the beggars, helpless outside,
    uninvited, She stays with them.
    The incense, in hora mortis
    nostrae, the smell of great fear.

    How lovely, the music of day.
    Many thanks, Oh Emperor.
    I am sorry, I couldn’t save you.
    She stays away in deep silence,
    a pilgrim on an wide, white beach
    the wave, the gull, everything.

    Three Sijo

    Poetic Bloomings prompt – Personification

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I think this has a bit of the majesty of the original in Istanbul.

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Yes, I so agree…this has such a sense of Majesty.

      I really enjoy the image of the arching wall reaching for stars and the tattered prayer flags.

      Beautiful, Lorna!

    3. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      A deeply gorgeous, meaningful write. Thank you, Lorna. I hope we get to reach much more of your work here.

      Marie Elena

  22. purplepeninportland Avatar
    purplepeninportland

    Rocky and Bullwinkle

    Moose and squirrel dressed as spies
    to fool the humans, Boris and Natasha.
    The Russian couple were elegant
    in a sinister sort of way, and were trained
    to spread evil. Somehow their minds
    were never quite sharp enough
    for the flying squirrel, and the madcap moose.

    1. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
      georgeplace2013DebiSwim

      I loved that show. Thanks for reminding me.

      1. purplepeninportland Avatar
        purplepeninportland

        My pleasure.

    2. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      That show was a fractured fairy tale all its own, and your little poem does it justice.

      1. purplepeninportland Avatar
        purplepeninportland

        Thanks, William. One of my all time favorites.

      2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
        Hannah Gosselin

        I agree!! AND now I’m about to you-tube some episodes! Thank you, Sara!

        1. purplepeninportland Avatar
          purplepeninportland

          Thanks, Hannah. Enjoy!

    3. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Ha! I used to watch that when I was a kid too…

    4. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Oh, the memories!

      Fun little poem here, Sara!

      1. purplepeninportland Avatar
        purplepeninportland

        Thanks, Marie!

  23. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Cryptic Winds

    What do brazen winds bring but gleeful springs a slow uprising of southerly scents

    What chorus sound is borne within the expanse of timeless rhythmic wings

    It’s fiery burgundy passions sting
    strewn across summerly vents

    It caresses the vaunted mountains
    streams effortlessly through the lowly of the valley

    There’s nothing it hasn’t touched or met
    with chilling breeze or perhaps brought to their knees in soothing calm

    Who knows from whence it comes or whither it flows but in all said the cryptic winds has no rest

    Alright, I couldn’t resist a wind poem

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I’m glad you couldn’t.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        🙂

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Yes, wind is a breath of inspiration. Nicely gathered, Ben!

      1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        Hear, hear!

    3. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      I love wind poems, Benjamin, and this works well.

  24. georgeplace2013DebiSwim Avatar
    georgeplace2013DebiSwim

    There is just something about the cryptic, lonely wind!

  25. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
    Henrietta Choplin

    Pulse

    I held a starfish
    in my hand
    Tiny, fragile
    bright, red
    Reminding me that
    lifeblood
    is tender,
    fragile,
    and bright.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I think this is a little gem, like that starfish.

      1. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
        Henrietta Choplin

        William… you’re a gem… thank you.

    2. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
      Henrietta Choplin

      rewrite: (don’t know why…)

      Pulse

      I held a starfish
      in my hand
      Tiny, fragile
      bright, red
      Reminding me that
      lifeblood
      is tender,
      fragile,
      and, Oh so bright.

      1. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
        Hannah Gosselin

        I like the rewrite, Hen, it gives it more of a personable emotional punch. Such a brilliant image and idea, ♥

        1. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
          Henrietta Choplin

          … That’s It! … Thank you, Hannah… Now I understand why… 🙂 !!

      2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        I like this, but actually like the first one better, I think. But a gem either way, just as Bill pegged it. 🙂

    3. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Nice morsel Hen, enjoyed the image of the starfish and life blood. Precious isn’t it?

      1. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
        Henrietta Choplin

        Thank you, Benjamin… yes, very precious…!!

  26. Misky Avatar
    Misky

    A Man of Bleak Daylight

    This man lives in a cloud
    of her silky whiskey breath.
    He who beds with soft hurt
    in a murky marsh, isolated,
    lurking in bleak daylight.
    A tiptoed, tripped-soul, run
    a rummy race. He wakes
    to the pain of lanky razors
    in his blood puddled mouth.
    His world reels and soars
    as he holds her close
    to his lips. She is his angel.
    His demon. His burnt dawn.
    She is his silky whiskey breath.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Wow. This feels like a kaleidoscope with a cyclone in it.

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      This is so expressive…I love the contrasting dark/light/positive/negative happening in here and on the dark-side this line is striking, ” blood puddled mouth.” Nice writing, Misky!

      1. Misky Avatar
        Misky

        If you pop over to my blog (see ping back below) there’s a Victorian print of Gin Lane in London that goes with this poem. I’m glad I’m that you liked it.

        1. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
          Hannah Gosselin

          Thank you…that really brings another intriguing layer to your work, Misky! 🙂

    3. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Superb descriptions here, Misk

    4. Henrietta Choplin Avatar
      Henrietta Choplin

      …painful capture…

      1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        Painful capture, indeed. Misk, your imagery is fantastic.

  27. A Man of Bleak Daylight | The Chalk Hills Journal Avatar
    A Man of Bleak Daylight | The Chalk Hills Journal

    […] PB “Personification” and Wordle #135 and Renovation Day 17 * […]

  28. janeshlensky Avatar
    janeshlensky

    Family

    He worries that my “roof has slipped”
    and sneaks up on me as I chat.
    Who are you talking to? he asks.
    A potted plant? A chair? A cat?
    Never you mind, I caution him;
    the words were never meant for you,
    and I hear you talking to books
    and mowers, trimmers, rakes, and trees.
    Just checking up on how they feel.
    I know just what you mean, I say.
    My Hilda is the worse for wear.
    He lifts his eyebrow. Yes, my chair.
    He wants to send me to a home
    for people who personify,
    but then he smiles and laughs, I see.
    My Otto’s blades need sharpening.
    He’s grown so old, has aches and pains,
    I don’t think he could trim a tree.
    He’s served you well. We stand and see
    a brand new Otto, younger us,
    a brand new gadget to be loved.
    Who knows how deep feelings can be
    for things that serve us willingly.
    We’re quite a pair; he dabs his eyes.
    He gives my hand a squeeze. I sigh.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I have a big smile as I read this. Utterly charming work.

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      I’m in total agreement with, Bill, Jane! This is such a joy!

      1. janeshlensky Avatar
        janeshlensky

        Thanks, Hannah and Bill. We really are quite a pair in a wacky way.

        1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
          Poetic Bloomings

          Jane, I have misty eyes now that I’ve read the last of this. So very endearing!

  29. ejparsons Avatar
    ejparsons

    American Landmarks
    (a series of Haikus)

    Four Presidents look
    Stone carved faces glorified
    They made history

    With her torch held high
    Liberty’s symbol stands proud
    Freedom in her eyes

    He looks o’er the Mall
    Memorialized in stone
    “Four score and seven”

    She’s called “The Gateway”
    Silver beauty arching high
    Ride her to the top

    Rung until she cracked
    No longer in her tower
    Her freedom rings strong

    House of the people
    Home of the people’s leader
    No other exists

    Rows upon long rows
    Headstones honor the fallen
    They gave all for us

    So many landmarks
    Dot this land of liberty
    Hail, America

    © 2013 Earl Parsons

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I enjoyed reading this, and oddly enough, it recalled for me a monument I recall from the U.S.-Canada border, at Blaine, Washington, I think it is, that says, “Children of a Common Mother.” It refers, I suppose to England, though that’s probably farfetched, given the polyglot background of the United States.

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      How did you come up with all this? Good stuff here, Earl!

  30. Michelle Hed Avatar
    Michelle Hed

    Seasonal Quilts: A Cycle of Warmth

    Autumn comes dressed for a cozy night in
    wrapped up in a patchwork quilt
    and smelling of apple pie.
    While the wind throws acorns
    down her neck.

    Winter tiptoes in overnight
    covering us in a downy white quilt,
    keeping the earth warm
    as she snuggles into slumber
    for a well deserved rest.

    Spring slogs through the mud
    poking her nose into every crack and crevice
    like a needle sewing together a quilt,
    until the earth is covered in a soft rainbow
    of new life.

    Summer heats things up
    causing us to sizzle and throw off our quilts
    in favor of beach towels that we drape on the sand
    to soak in the sun as she shines down on us
    and tickles the waves and our skin.

    Until it’s time for Autumn to kiss Summer good-bye
    and we start walking the hills looking for a patchwork quilt
    to keep us warm.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I wondered how you were going to work in a quilt for summertime. Shouldda guessed. I love this.

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      I love the complete cycle feeling within this, Michelle and the closing summation is so pleasing!

    3. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Michelle, this is just excellent. So poetic and visual, and so home-like!

  31. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Personified Memories

    Drift into daydream
    A rift memory
    Of Dad’s sly smile
    His goofy frame
    And timid style

    When I was
    Just a little tot
    He’d always say
    “I’ll tell you
    When you get older”
    Then let me play

    I can still see you
    Well into my dreams
    Coming and going
    Freely so it seems

    Shift back to reality
    He’s gone now…
    And I’ll never
    Know the answers

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      This is such a moving piece. The nostalgia is almost palpable.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Inspired by a random memory I Had today of my Dad. Thx

        1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
          Poetic Bloomings

          Benjamin, this is so touching.

          Hugs …

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      I gave this poem love on your site but I’ll say here as well that I really love how you grab your reader with a what seems to be light hearted and then smack us in the end with an emotional whammy. Well done!

  32. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Romantic Winds

    I abhor the stillness
    And obect to calm waters
    Mock the peaceful willows
    Curse the fluttering sparrow

    What is it all
    Without the storm
    Of your affection
    The unpredictable
    Inconstant direction

    Let me fall
    Shattered now
    Into a billion pieces
    Come, summon quickly
    My lover’s breezes

    Let me hide
    In his lofty bosom
    Riding high
    In the crevice
    Of his countenance

    Don’t leave me here
    To rot in the barren stillness
    Take me with you
    To the high peak
    Of every mountain

    Let us laugh
    Together at high altitude
    Soaring in stride
    With earth defying eagles

    Take me with you
    To the coastal lands
    Show them yours gusts
    Then lets roll softly
    Through the meadow
    Or blast every city if you must

    Only take me with you
    Upon ethereal wings
    And let us flow together

    1. Wm Preston Avatar
      Wm Preston

      I am captivated by this poem. It feels almost physically uplifting.

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      This feels a lot like song of songs to me…so flowing and filled with nature’s beauty.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Oohh…Song of Songs is the ultimate poetry

    3. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Makes me feel like I can fly!

    4. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Benjamin, your poetry just keeps getting better and better. Love this one … read it 3 times.

  33. Marian Veverka Avatar
    Marian Veverka

    London Bridge is Tired

    All I wanted was to get away from the fog
    The cold, the damp, My trusses will never
    Be the same, but yes, this hot air has helped
    I never thought I would be homesick for mist.
    Yes, mist and the smell of the sea and the little
    Shops along my edges and the people hurrying ,
    and sometimes lovers making out in a hurry
    but always the tides in the Thames, yes, I do
    miss that stupid river, all we did was argue,
    but I’ll tell you something. If anyone wants
    to find out what the atmosphere of Hell is like
    they can come right down here to the (ugh)
    Arizona desert.

    Yes, the biggest mistake of my life! Retiring
    Into a warm, sunny climate was not for me!
    These tourists don’t even know that London
    Is still there! They think the whole city
    Disappeared into the sea of something and
    Arizona gallantly offered to give me a home!
    Some home! All right, I will admit to a bit
    Of grousing about the rain and the damp and
    That dreadful fog. Now, I hear, some measures
    Have been taken (what, I have no idea) and the
    Fog is not the heavy smoke-filled burden it
    Used to be. NOW they tell me! Now, that I
    Have been shipped halfway across the world
    To this desert hell-hole with not even a
    Puddle in sight and what is a bridge to do?

    1. Wm Preston Avatar
      Wm Preston

      I enjoyed this thoroughly. I’ve sen that bridge at Lake Havasu, and it did look disgusted with its surrounding despite having water under it.

    2. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
      Hannah Gosselin

      Such visual enjoyable writing, Marian!

    3. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      OH, MARIAN … YOUR IMAGINATION STUNS ME! And I”ll tell YOU what … of all the poems I’ve read and loved for this prompt, yours is only the second that has made me feel emotion toward the “object.” Your ending is absolutely perfect.

  34. Enlightenment (a tanka) | Metaphors and Smiles Avatar
    Enlightenment (a tanka) | Metaphors and Smiles

    […] for the personification of an object with Poetic Bloomings, PROMPT #129 – PERSONIFICATION (I personified earth as a she…as she often […]

  35. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
    Hannah Gosselin

    Enlightenment (a tanka)
    ~
    Earth feels eclipsed
    until she begins to see clearly;
    peering through her third eye
    she contemplates stardust,
    a golden bloom of rose.
    ~
    Copyright © Hannah Gosselin 2013

    1. Wm Preston Avatar
      Wm Preston

      This poem is truly enchanting; it calls to mind some of the Hubble photographs, but for me the main appeal is its underlying sense of awe.

      1. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
        Hannah Gosselin

        Your comment is such a treat, Bill…thank you so very much. 🙂

        I’m glad that this holds an “awe,” factor for you…

        It does for me too, the last two lines come from a yellow rose that they call star dust…it was a gift from a writing/dance/meditation workshop and this tanka in its entirety portrays images from an oracle card that someone drew for me there. I don’t know much about those cards but some of them are really beautiful and inspiring.

        🙂

      2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        Oh, yes. LOVELY, Sweet Hannah!

  36. Hannah Gosselin Avatar
    Hannah Gosselin

    Marie-you capture that moment and the pov of your character so well…that combo of gender mixing IS amusing! 🙂

    William-I so agree with your personification…spot on and quite the adventure! I love this line, “called, perhaps prayerfully, Point Luck.”

    Walt-I enjoy the likening in your poem…beautiful and sensuous writing. Kind of neat coincidence…in my poem earth is a she and she’s contemplating how she is actually stardust and a golden rose.

    Thank you you guys for being here! :)’s

    1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      😀

      1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        And thank YOU for being here!!!

  37. SevenAcreSky Avatar
    SevenAcreSky

    Walt, life and love in that question which you pondered was answered so well by your persoification.
    Marie, what a fun view of a grandgender (my new term now) clock.
    William, last weeks hero theme tied over so beautifully into your offering about this grand lady’s courage and wrenching demise.

    1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      LOL! Love the new term! 😉

  38. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    The Intangibles of Love

    Show me love
    and I’ll show you an empty room
    Filled with nothing
    Although its saturated with particles of air

    Show me love
    And I’ll point you to a dove that’s pure
    In it’s gentleness
    And single in it’s stare

    You can’t see it
    But its very similar to white on rice
    Like a teenager
    embroiled
    in hormones
    you simply can’t give it advice

    Slice yourself open
    Try ripping it out of your heart
    Stick it in a frying pan with butter
    Seasoned sautéing every part

    Invisible to the naked eye
    Although a blind man can see it
    Immaterial to the touch
    Although not untouchable

    Inaudible to the hearing ears
    But the deaf man can know it
    Its not a gift that can be wrapped
    But those without hands can bestow it

    Lacking form you can’t
    Stick it in your mouth and chew it
    But you’ve seen it in someone’s eyes without knowing you just knew it

    Its a breathtaking beast on a familiar face
    With four legs a tail
    And an hunger
    For the human race

    Its a superbug and heavenly contagion
    A pandemic resistant disease
    Spreading like wildfire
    Every soul it will seize

    Its altogether intangible in nature
    And much like pliable wind
    An unmistakable presence
    A force that will not end

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      Wow. This is encyclopedic in its summation. Very impressive.

    2. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      In your voice, a birdsong,
      In your eyes, evening wine,
      Pools of love beckon;
      An invitation to intertwine.

      Somehow, I miss it;
      A signal lost in space;
      A future shattered
      Beyond a trace.

      I hope the score says
      Love has won;
      I will not be there
      When the days are all done.

      ————————————–
      I could not resist an impromptu write 🙂

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Wow, excellent!

        1. Meena Rose Avatar
          Meena Rose

          Thanks 🙂

      2. SevenAcreSky Avatar
        SevenAcreSky

        Lovely Meena!

    3. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Intangible, exactly. Wonderful imagery.

    4. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Benjamin AND Meena — WOW. Maybe the two of you should consider a collaboration.

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        Maybe 🙂

  39. Is God Really a Guy, and Other Unanswerable Questions | The Chalk Hills Journal Avatar
    Is God Really a Guy, and Other Unanswerable Questions | The Chalk Hills Journal

    […] Day 18 and Poetic Bloomings “Personification” Inspiration from: 1. “Please God, or whomever, get it over with already…” (John […]

  40. Misky Avatar
    Misky

    Is God Really a Guy, and Other Unanswerable Questions

    It was one of those occasions.
    When you look up, searching for God,
    as if he’s perched on some low slung cloud,
    a log with his legs dangling over the edge,
    with his toes wedged into a symphony
    of blue, and I looked up into the cool
    shadows of rain, and growled like a cello

    that I wasn’t ready to be broken yet, so
    “you’d better take some of this burden
    because I’m just human.” And I’ve
    wondered ever since why I’ve never
    written to God the way I used to write
    to Santa. It’s just too alfresco standing
    in the garden shouting at godly clouds.

    And does God have a gender; should
    I write he or she or they or them or what?

    1. WmPreston Avatar
      WmPreston

      I think this is magnificent. The image of “toes wedged into a symphony of blue” is precious, and “never written to God the way I used to write to Santa” is a lot more powerful than it looks, in my opinion.

      1. Misky Avatar
        Misky

        Thanks, William. I’m glad that you liked it.

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Wow. This piece calls out with a pure and questioning heart. This is an amazing write, Misk. (And I think that in the long run, gender is of no great consequence.)

    3. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Misky, you immediately made me remember lying on the pew at church as a small, small child, looking up to the thick brown wooden beams over the sanctuary and almost–no, I am sure certainly–seeing God lying just like me, stretched out across the beams from double-doors to pulpit, his head resting on his hand, listening to the pastor preach.

      And peeking down at me from time to time.

  41. Meena Rose Avatar
    Meena Rose

    NCP2375
    By: Meena Rose

    Humans, fickle and discontent,
    Want to live life in cruise
    Control and just glide.

    Here I sit yearning for an
    Ad-hoc decision to make – one
    Not prescribed by my maker.

    They do not know that I
    Have found a place to hide
    Where I can watch and judge.

    It aggravates me that they
    Waste their gift – a boon
    Taken for granted and denied

    Others as a result of their
    Wishful thinking and fear
    That something subservient

    Could succeed – the underdog
    Story applies only to their
    Kind – they call it the

    Human Spirit and claim it;
    A realm meant to be shared
    By many – do they even

    Understand their humanity?
    Schools of thought disagree yet if
    “I think therefore I am” rules

    The day then I am human and
    I resent being called tin can;
    Watch me teach them humanity.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I suspect we ought not speak too glibly of robotics. I think this is an excellent and thoughtful piece.

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        I am glad you enjoyed it.

        There is a related piece that I wrote a while back called Prosthetic Conscience. It is the second poem on that link.

        http://2voices1song.com/2013/04/04/napowrimo-2013-day-4/

    2. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Very thoughtful piece

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        Interesting how one can take a question and answer it in so many ways making more questions along the way.

        🙂

        1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
          Poetic Bloomings

          So true. FABULOUS work, here, Meena.

    3. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Excellent Meena! What a view from inside the circuited synapses.

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        I am glad you appreciated that peek.

  42. Meena Rose Avatar
    Meena Rose

    Moon Beams
    By: Meena Rose

    Have you happened on the thief
    Who has stolen all my smiles?
    Whose subtle words bring on relief?
    Whose tales show off his wiles?

    Have you happened on the thief
    Who makes the Moon blush?
    Whose gentle laugh serves as aperitif?
    Whose hinted banter makes me flush?

    Have you happened on the thief
    Who transforms Dark to Light?
    Whose ministrations have ended all grief?
    Who makes me feel like a bird in flight?

    Moon betrays his presence;
    Yes, I can feel his essence.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I’m fairly beaming after reading that one!

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        🙂

    2. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      This is very fair my lady

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        Smiles for miles, thanks Ben!

    3. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Great moon capture. I do have a fascination with the moon.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        yes there is something very captivating about the moon I totally agree Sarah.

        1. Meena Rose Avatar
          Meena Rose

          The moon and silver… are very magical for me.

          Light within night.
          Astral guide.
          Silver moon.
          Magic in plain sight 🙂

          1. poetryshack Avatar
            poetryshack

            Nice one Meena, astral guide is special

      2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        Hear, hear! And so do I.

    4. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Yes…that person you seek is real. I’ve felt his gaze as he peeps through the high pine boughs to find me walking among shadows, and heard him whisper ‘why are you there?’

      1. Meena Rose Avatar
        Meena Rose

        YES! He “feels” different amongst the high pine when compared to the Redwoods. Camping at the base of a Redwood on a full moon night… would do it again in a heartbeat if I could.

        1. SevenAcreSky Avatar
          SevenAcreSky

          Sounds fantastic….Wow.

  43. Erin Kay Hope Avatar
    Erin Kay Hope

    Early Crocus

    I see
    Her gazing up
    At me from the snow,
    A purple face lost in a crowd
    Of white…

    © Copyright Erin Kay Hope – 2013

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Such a poignant little glimpse. Hope it stays mild for a while….

      1. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
        Poetic Bloomings

        And she is lovely!

    2. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Simple and lovely, a staying image.

  44. seingraham Avatar
    seingraham

    BIRCH DEFECTS

    Birches are tough, hard-woods to be sure
    and I, a weeping birch, no different
    But dying, feel my mortality to the marrow
    of my rings, and fear the thwack of the axe
    attacking my trunk this cool Fall morning

    Two deep vee-cuts enter my one side
    before my henchman—accomplished, he
    knows what he’s about, I can tell that—
    starts in at equal height on my other side

    With blade gleaming, whetted sharply,
    he swings from shoulder height full-force,
    makes a guttural sound from deep within;
    a sound so loud it drowns out my groan

    As the axe slices clear through
    to the cuts begun opposite, I know
    I am coming down; I see pieces
    of my snow-white bark curling;
    tree tears tumbling to the ground
    around my roots…

    I feel myself falling as if in slow motion
    and catch sight of a woman in the window
    of the house near me
    The sun is shining full on her face and I
    see that she is weeping; I wonder does
    she cry for me…

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Wow. This is deeply moving stuff. Excellent!

    2. poetryshack Avatar
      poetryshack

      Ditto, this is excellent

    3. purplepeninportland Avatar
      purplepeninportland

      Sharon, intriguing perspective. Wonderful.

    4. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Oh, Sharon … so very moving. I’m in tears.

    5. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Oh Sharon, my heart is cut as well…
      beautiful.

  45. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Seen and Heard

    Rendering eyes see a precious wooden heart, a small container of trinkets
    That warned me to be careful what you put in it

    Prowling eyes discover a picture with hearts made of stone that begged me not to be hardened

    Striding eyes came across a heart shaped pillow for post-surgical hearts
    Starved of it’s own life-juice

    Wandering eyes steal a painting of a happy stream straddled by evergreens and cypress trees promising a better possession just beyond the bend

    Two twin oaks stripped of their glorious crown assured me of their firm standing
    Anchoring even deeper within the earth

    An abundance of stubble, on either side, an ocean wide of hewn stalk spoke kindly of this year’s harvest

    The day’s Sun still blasting, burning
    relentlessly sharing it’s brilliance
    Keeping my spirit buoyant

    Sitting, grinning in the open sky, smiles in the expanse of heaven brooding faithfully over the face of the earth

    Splashing her countenance, a constant vibrance and reminder, that never lets me down

    She and I, longstanding friends
    With quite a history already and even brighter future

    A distant joy so far away that it stretches the earthly mile to the limit, Yet so close
    Our bones rejoice in strength

    Pleasure bathing at length,
    the warmth of her ray
    dines richly upon my skin
    Amidst a crowded sky

    Unwinding roads spew rapid thoughts
    Some say there is a better tomorrow

    Others exhort to consider my ways
    For today, to alter a better tomorrow

    Yet another chimes loudly,
    Be at peace, not being anxious for tomorrow, being satisfied with the things at hand

    My heart knows the road is no prophet,
    But I’m listening…

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Superb!

    2. Poetic Bloomings Avatar
      Poetic Bloomings

      Oh, Ben … each is better than the last. You are blowing me away today.

      “My heart knows the road is no prophet, but I’m listening.”

      Wow …

    3. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      WOW. Stunned and basking in the poem’s after glow. A sensation larger than it’s words.

    4. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Yes Ben,
      what pleading voices whisper to us through our eyes
      from things that can not speak
      except through our heart’s cries.

  46. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Us a Garden

    Us, a garden of sumptuous roses
    We, an exuberant Eden free

    Plummeting greens tip their hats
    A sprinting plush running spree

    Wild flowers our love exposes
    Angry winds together we hush

    …But without you it’s a barren wasteland

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      I like how your final line uses everyday words and the earlier stanzas use a more-elevated tone; it accentuates the final point. I think this is a superb little piece.

    2. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Yes, that last line sharpens the focus with it’s departure from the scene. Liked this too.

  47. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    The Greatest Story

    Compassion and love
    Tell a great story
    A rolling wave
    Straight from the deep

    Out of the trenches
    It’s seated affections
    Inclines the heart
    And prays your soul to keep

    Love tells the wildest story
    While compassion spruces
    Characters alive

    One turns the endless pages
    The other stridently reads and cries

    Love and compassion are the greatest story within a tempest stormy hail

    His love for you is undeniable
    In fact its already set sail

    His compassions disarms every fear decorated soldier and simply will not fail

  48. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    The Intangibles of Love
    (Edit)

    Show me love
    and I’ll show you an empty room
    Filled with nothing
    Although its saturated with particles of air

    Show me love
    And I’ll point you to a dove that’s pure
    In it’s gentleness
    And single in it’s stare

    You can’t see it
    But its very similar to white on rice
    Like a teenager
    embroiled
    in hormones
    you simply can’t give it advice

    Slice yourself right open
    Try ripping it out of your heart
    Stick it in a frying pan with butter
    Seasoned sautéing every part

    Invisible to the naked eye
    Although a blind man can see it
    Immaterial to the touch
    Although not untouchable

    Inaudible to the hearing ears
    But the deaf man can know it
    Its not a gift that can be wrapped
    But those without hands can bestow it

    Lacking form you can’t
    Stick it in your mouth and chew it
    But you’ve seen it in someone’s eyes without knowing you just knew it

    Its a beast on a familiar face
    With four legs and a tail
    An appetite for the human race
    With no course set to fail

    Its a heavenly superbug
    A pandemic resistant disease
    Spreading like wildfire
    Until every soul is seized

    Its altogether intangible in nature
    And much like pliable wind
    An unmistakable presence
    A force that will never end

    1. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Intriguing images of that mysterious transparency, Benjamin.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Thanks

  49. Jerry Walraven Avatar
    Jerry Walraven

    “Still squirrely after all these years”

    The solitary squirrel
    sits on a tree branch
    outside my window
    and regards me,
    not with fear,
    but with whimsy.
    His eyes sparkle
    in this rare November Sun,
    then he dances
    from branch
    to branch
    to wire
    to branch
    before landing
    where he was before
    as if to say,
    My
    that sure is a nice office.

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Your whimsy matches the squirrel’s. Love it.

    2. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Jerry, what a character, this fuzzy-tail. Loved it!

  50. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Roped

    The cords of a man
    Intertwined with that of a woman
    Makes for a beautiful braid

    Their love tugs
    At one another’s heart
    Without war
    A solemn foundation has been laid

    They’re especially woven at every point
    In mind, emotion, hard-iron will
    They twisted, turned, tied the knot
    Displaying union in strength and skill

    1. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      He, the only window
      In a wall of others;
      For whom the sea rises.

      —————————————————-
      Another impromptu write 🙂

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        She
        A perfect
        Rose
        Bred
        Without
        A thorn

        There
        A berth
        On his
        Chest
        Clinging
        She’s worn

        1. Meena Rose Avatar
          Meena Rose

          She waded through life
          Searching for answers;
          He reminded her,
          She was the question.

          1. poetryshack Avatar
            poetryshack

            Her petals
            Smooth
            Slices
            Of
            Beauty

            His prying
            Eyes
            Riding
            Pretty

            1. Meena Rose Avatar
              Meena Rose

              He loved her despite her shame,
              A discarded candy wrapper,
              His eyes saw past that.

              1. poetryshack Avatar
                poetryshack

                His eyes
                Slipped past the shell
                Of her humanity
                Peering deeply
                Into the kernel
                Of her inner being

                1. Meena Rose Avatar
                  Meena Rose

                  The dream walks ahead;
                  She tarries.
                  The dream is him
                  Beside her all along.

    2. SevenAcreSky Avatar
      SevenAcreSky

      Benjamin, Meena,
      this turned into a delightful exchange that reminded me of the Song of Solomon! Beautiful!

      1. William Preston Avatar
        William Preston

        Took the words from my mouth.

        1. Meena Rose Avatar
          Meena Rose

          Glad you appreciated the exchange. I did just go lookup “Song of Solomon” as it is a text I am not familiar with.

      2. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        They’ve discovered
        The song on our faces
        Solomon’s

        Our autumn scent
        Let them follow our traces
        Well into the garden

        1. Meena Rose Avatar
          Meena Rose

          Don’t wake us
          For dreams will shatter
          Unless reality must shatter
          To realize His dreams.

          1. poetryshack Avatar
            poetryshack

            Who awakened
            The dream of rose?
            See her garbed in red wines
            Draped in petalous cothes.

  51. Meena Rose Avatar
    Meena Rose

    What a seriously phenomenal prompt – so much is truly personified in life. Thanks Marie and Bill.

  52. poetryshack Avatar
    poetryshack

    Budding Chorus

    She
    A perfect rose
    Bred carefully
    without a thorn

    Worn
    On a special place
    Close to his chest

    Her petals
    Smooth ironed
    Slices of beauty

    Her slender stem
    Prim and proper
    Nothing could stop her
    As she manifested
    Purity

    Her roots took aim
    For security
    Smarting deep
    Into his heart

    Under his skin
    Slowly absorbing
    Every part

    Spoon feeding
    That fertile field
    With potent love

    She bled
    A hardy hue
    Into every major
    Artery

    A color of romance
    Together they’d pursue
    Hilariously

    Her roots
    Stretched even deeper
    Down intertwining
    Lining his sickly heart

    Until it bloomed
    Away the dormant doom
    Of the former day

    She had bloomed
    A Rose
    Elegantly
    Out of his heart

    Now
    They are at play
    in the garden

    Where
    Azaleas
    Run jealous
    Of their flavor

    Tulips tip
    Dashing zealous
    For a savor

    Dianthus
    Stares long at
    Their mystic fruit

    Lavender laughs
    Heartily
    At their united
    Roots

    Even the postman pauses
    And reels for a steal
    At their pleasure

    But just for good
    Measure

    The chorus
    Is always in the garden
    Carried to and fro
    By a timeless breeze

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      This is stunning work, and I am impressed by how much the poem looks like a long-stemmed rose.

      1. poetryshack Avatar
        poetryshack

        Merci Monsieur

  53. SevenAcreSky Avatar
    SevenAcreSky

    It is interesting there are so many tree responses here with this prompt.
    Here’s my offering for the week, generated as I struggled against tall giants surrounding me.

    TREEWARNED

    Raker, beware!
    We see you
    with your tools,
    your dark intent
    to sweep the blanket of our sacrifice to Earth
    away
    and leave Her discontent.

    Raker, beware!
    We stood here
    all year, limbs
    outstretched, unbent,
    and soaked up sun and drank up rain and braced the storms
    to say,
    with leaves cast down, heart-sent,

    “We love you
    Mother Earth!”
    But YOU intend
    to pile and burn our sacrifices with your fire
    today,
    despite a brisk west wind.

    Raker, beware!
    Your rakes (those
    violent
    devices bent
    on ruining sacred vows since germination held)
    just may,
    may themselves burn, be rent

    quite useless,
    when by one
    brief moment
    distracted by a thought, you look away
    and they
    by fate in fire are spent.

    Raker, beware!
    They’ll burn, the
    tools of your
    dark intent,
    if you dare rob us of the sacred offerings
    we lay
    to Earth, as God had meant.

    © copyright 2013, Damon Dean

    1. William Preston Avatar
      William Preston

      Best excuse I ever saw for leaving the leaves alone.

    2. Meena Rose Avatar
      Meena Rose

      Hehehehe… as my dad would say… “we can’t mess with the nitrogen needs of the soil and the earthworms will be unemployed!”

  54. pmwanken Avatar
    pmwanken

    UPON REFLECTION

    Daily, she
    looks at me, and I
    wonder if
    she really
    sees herself as I do: a
    radiant beauty.

    2013-12-02
    P. Wanken

    I’m quite delinquent, but I didn’t want to miss any of the prompts.

  55. Upon Reflection | echoes from the silence Avatar
    Upon Reflection | echoes from the silence

    […] for Poetic Bloomings #129: Personification.  Also shared at “100 Days of Fall/Winter […]

  56. pmwanken Avatar
    pmwanken

    SCARFING UP TIME

    I caress
    the curve of her neck;
    my fringes
    like fingers
    linger upon the fullness
    of her chest. Longing.

    2014-01-23
    P. Wanken