Walt’s prompts tease the muse week, after week, after week.  Your responses to this week’s brilliant twist on an old theme ran the gamut, and all were simply splendid.  You make it so hard to choose a single poem!


After much reading and re-reading, I decided to highlight “Melvin’s best” by Andrew Kreider.  This poem is in true Kreider style and humor, and tells a full story in three short stanzas.  Can you tell which words were mandatory?  Probably not, because it flows flawlessly.  Andrew, thanks for the chuckles!  This “Bloom” is for you.

 Melvin’s best (by Andrew Kreider)

Melvin, what in tarnation did
you all put in this hooch?
It sure ain’t your run-of-the-mill
passion prune juice. No sir.
That stuff is so strong, it could make
the good General himself

fall straight out of his saddle.
I poured a couple of shots for
me and Connie at sundown
and last thing I remember is her
ample pulchritude swimming
before my eyes, as you might say.

I can’t hide it from you, old friend,
I thought I’d done my last rodeo.
But Connie, what a woman.
When I came to, she just looked down
at me on the kitchen floor and laughed:
“That’s strong stuff…Hit me again!”


Iain Douglas Kemp – Congratulations!

The Silent Devotion of the Sergeant-at-Arms (by Iain Douglas Kemp)

The ORDEAL had its BEGINNING so long ago,
so long it has become ROUTINE,
his HEART hidden by a VEIL of service
and serenity.

He lays down his cloak that she may pass dry-footed.
He lays down his sword that she may sleep without fear.

Each SUNSET brings the same dream,
the same forlorn, empty hope
vanishing with the dawn
and stoicism

He lays down his sorrows that she may live in trust
He lays down his aspirations that she may rule respected

With cunning ART he ignores her perfume
as he QUAFFS of her RADIANCE.
Dedicated to his Queen until

12 thoughts on “BEAUTIFUL BLOOMS – PROMPT #89

  1. Thanks, Marie! What a lovely surprise – especially amidst so many wonderful pieces this week.
    Iain, congratulations to you. Great to see/hear your work again. Your piece had me thinking of stories of Sir Walter I learned in school…

  2. Iain and Andrew, you both deserve kudos. Each story had different intent and delivered exactly that. Congratulations to both of you.

    Wise and wonderful choices for the week, Marie and Walt.

  3. Andrew and Iain, Congratulations!! Both wonderful poems and made me smile, one in laughter and the other in tenderness. Well done 🙂

  4. Everytime I read This is Just to Say, I think what’s to forgive, the plums as described must have been really tempting, so you go on with your bad self (whoever you are) but just don’t do it again! But then one wonders, is the poet really talking about plums? This image of something desired that is suddenly taken away. I wickedly think of a suitor chasing after his girl’s virginity only for her to give it up to another man oops sorry! Is the speaker sincerely asking for forgiveness? What does one make of its taunting tone? Is this a note between lovers? So many questions come up after reading this short poem and all from the tantalizing image of the plums against that absurd apology. The poet Kenneth Koch believed that poems should be just plain fun, as demonstrated by his parody of This is Just to Say. In Variations… , Koch imitates the flavor of and maintains the theme of the Williams’ poem. However, he uses four topics to illustrate the theme. Koch, unlike Williams, does not rely on one powerful image. Variations.. relies on the evocation of feelings to convey the same message and therefore is more exuberant and a bit extreme. Also, it reads as retialiation by Koch, against Williams, for the earlier infringement in This is Just to Say. Which is the best or more enjoyable? I really like This is Just to Say. I’m amazed that such clear, simple language coupled with one powerful image can evoke so much. On the other hand, Variations of a Theme … is just plain fun and wicked. Both are good examples of accessible and enjoyable poetry. What more can one asks for?

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