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IN-FORM POET WEDNESDAY – LUNE

The LUNE, (known as the American Haiku) was first created by the poet Robert Kelly as a result of Kelly’s frustration with English haiku. He devised a 13-syllable, self-contained poem that consisted of 5 syllables in the first line, 3 syllables in the second line and 5 syllable in the final line.

Unlike haiku, there are no other rules. Rhymes are accepted; subject matter is open. While there are less syllables to use, this form has a little more freedom.

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There is a variation of the lune created by poet Jack Collom. His form is also a self-contained tercet, but his poem is word-based (not syllable-based). The structure is 3 words in the first line, 5 words in the second line and 3 words in the final line.

As with Kelly’s lune, there are no other rules.

MARIE ELENA’S COLLOM LUNE:

Cosa sia meglio?
Sophie essere la nonna di.
Niente e meglio.

Translation:

What is best?
Being Sophie’s Grandmother.
Nothing is better.

(So much prettier in Italian, eh? 😉 )

WALT’S LUNE (COLLUM):

At evening’s end,
the sun seeks refuge below,
amidst orange glow.

 

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107 thoughts on “IN-FORM POET WEDNESDAY – LUNE

  1. One of my fave forms…thanks for sharing!

  2. Wot no lune
    examples to read?
    I shall sulk.

    Where are the poems
    Walt, Marie?
    You’re selling us short.

    Just joking:
    for the fun of it –
    lune a tick

  3. A drift of leaves fall
    past my door –
    autumn’s here once more.

  4. Autumn’s rushing by;
    Thanksgiving is almost here again;
    How time flies.

  5. Such a pretty form;
    Lunes are great!
    Simple, short and sweet.

  6. Words flow from my pen,
    Creating,
    Shaping thoughts and dreams.

  7. Wonders of nature
    Amaze me;
    Creation divine.

  8. Despite the miles
    That spread themselves between us,
    We remain friends.

  9. janeshlensky on said:

    slow breath precedes death
    autumn light
    a leaf falls windless

    • Marjory M Thompson (MMT) on said:

      Then a time to rest before rebirth. 🙂

    • Iris D on said:

      Jane, this left me breathless. (Sorry, could not resist play on words)but this really is lovely.

    • Henrietta Choplin on said:

      …cry…

    • Andra Negroiu on said:

      Jane, I love the juxtaposition of images … a paralell between two transitions: from season to season and from life to death.

      • janeshlensky on said:

        Thanks, friends. Andra, a physician friend of mine points out that at changes of seasons, more people die than at other times. She also says births and deaths attend full moons. I don’t know if research would back it up, but it makes perfectly good poetic sense to me 😉

        • I don’t know about the surge of deaths at changes of season, but there are definitely more births and accidents and ER visits at the time of the full moon. I think somebody actually did research to prove that. I myself am a “full moon” baby 🙂

  10. What wonderful love,
    In Christ’s death,
    Flows from God above!

  11. Marjory M Thompson (MMT) on said:

    These are cute little things. Wanted to see how the two Lunies compared, so did two sets 🙂

    LUNES per ROBERT KELLY
    SYLLABLES per line 5-3-5

    Chops cooking on grill
    family ‘round
    ball game in the yard.
    ———* * *———
    Signs of new season
    red, gold, brown
    covering the ground.
    ———* * *———
    White flaked wonderland
    Children play
    Chocolate by the fire
    ———* * *———
    Longer, warmer day,
    Trees in bud
    Hear bird’s mating call.

    LUNES per JACK COLLON
    WORDS per line 3-5-3

    Chops on grill
    Ball game in the yard
    Family gathered ‘round
    ———* * *———
    New season’s signs
    Covering the cold, wet ground
    Red, gold, brown.
    ———* * *———
    White flaked wonderland
    Children play in the snow
    Chocolate by fire
    ———* * *———
    Longer, warmer day,
    Flowers and Trees in bud
    Bird’s mating call.

  12. Diluted Lines

    Rain-woven arras
    veils the dawn –
    diaphanous trope.

  13. COLLUM LUNE

    Poems can translate
    well into the French language
    weirdly into Welsh

    transforming the lines
    into the worst kind of rubbish
    instead of poetry

  14. Iris D on said:

    Election day is over
    Come on guys
    Lets pull together

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  16. Iris D on said:

    Deciduous trees
    Shedding clothes
    Cedars wrap their’s close.

    A lone roadrunner
    Peek-a-boo
    Beneath the pine boughs

    Bright male cardinal
    With his mate
    Shares cedar berries

  17. Loving these offerings, all! Bless your little luney heart, Erin! 😉

    Marie Elena

  18. I love the spark this little form has ignited. Carry on and play with this concept. It is evoking some great pieces!

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  21. OK, tried my hand at a Collom lune. Pardon me if my politics are showing just a bit on this one. 😉

    On Election Results, 2012

    When political charlatans
    Divide and deceive the voters,
    We all lose.

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  24. Henrietta Choplin on said:

    Both, beautiful!!

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  26. Lune In-Form for Poetic Bloomings

    Black and blues appear
    no known cause
    They spread to my mind.
    ———-

    Are you contented?
    Can’t answer?
    Perhaps you are not.
    ———-

    Deep under water
    Life exists
    Harmony hums strength
    ———-

    Storm blew through the town
    Blew it up
    Left only the Blues
    ———-

    Please enlighten me
    Your heart holds
    anger, unaddressed.

  27. janeshlensky on said:

    Hiho, all. What wonderful Lunes today! I’m trying a quadruple, just for kicks.

    Love’s Lune-cy

    Saying you love me
    Such sweet words
    Do you wash dishes?

    Holding me closer
    Warms my heart
    Is laundry folded?

    Don’t stop loving me
    I love that—
    In a clean warm house.

    Great expectation
    Leads to deeds
    Words are love’s whipped cream.

  28. (Collom lune)

    clocks turned back
    dampness lingers in the fog
    late to rise

    (Kelly Lune)

    migration wings by
    seasons change
    her hair turns silver

  29. The vultures circle,
    Menacing
    And mesmerizing.

  30. Picturous? What a fun word! 🙂 Thanks, Marjory.

  31. It always happens
    When he’s gone:
    Somehow he’s still here.

  32. Chasing fantasies
    Through the night;
    Dreams are wondrous things.

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  34. Hi Sam,Great post!hmmm, I co&;ndu#8217lt remember you and jinoe asked permission to take that picture hahahaha you got me dude! Thanks for the company! It was a great LSD run. Next time ulet

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